(a)The girls were excited as they waited for the results.
There was silence and laughter in the hall.Everyone is waiting for their results. The boys were sweating and nervously waiting for their result and the girls were happy as they waited for the results.The principal walked to the stage and getting ready to announced the result. All eyes were on the principal.The principal had a dissapointed face as he was going to announced the results to everyone.Suddenly,everyone in the hall was quiet.
(e) She sat heart-broken on her bed.
She stared to the right of the bed realizing that there was no one there.She stared to left and still no one was there.She looked confused.Suddenly,she took a picture from the table near her bed.In the picture there was a happy man with a happy women. She still did not remember anything.She took a wedding picture from the table,now she remember what had happened. Tears dropped from her eyes as she sat heart-broken on her bed.
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Good effort in using more details to show. You might want to consider for (e), trying to start your sentences with more variation. Don't start every sentence with "she". It gets repetitive.
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